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Tick tock
gunshot
blood spilled
someone killed.

Tears flow
broken hearts
family friends
made apart.

On must
they go
till there
time come.

Tick tock
gunshot
blood spilled
they're killed.
bit sorta random.

30 words total.

reading it over after I wrote it and man does it sound pessimistic.
i dont quite understand myself at times.

No intention to offend anyone or deeply sadden anyone especially if they lost someone they cared about.

I wrote the first 4 lines (7 words), "liked" how they sound and tried to make up the rest.

It's a short concise cycle that continues.
we live we die :/

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XdarkXnXdeadlyX Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i like it alot :)
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Stardust-orginal Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Student Writer
er mer geerrd das beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Paper-x0 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Sounds kinda depressing :D
But I like it anyways. The words you chose make it sound cold and unfeeling.
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PassionFlowerGirl Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I think you did a great job with the flow of it 
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DEANJENO--art Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Student General Artist
**sorry for the late reply**

and THANKS ALOT !!!!!!!!!!! 
I appreciate that :D


and thanks for commenting :)
means alot :D !!! :headbang:
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