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The sky is stained with red
as the light dissappears over the horizon.......

Darkness covers the land.....

Shadows dance by the flickering flames,
as the survivors struggle to keep warm.
Blood dripping from their wounded bodies,
as they wish they were never born.

Biting cold winds claw at their flesh,
giving them little rest.
The rest of men have been destroyed,
and for all they know they're next.

The heavens look on in quiet dismay
as men pass on throughout the night.
Their bodies left behind, they escape.
Their wounded comrades left behind.

Darkness creeps into the survivors' hearts,
as their souls go under attack.
All hope is quickly stripped away
and replaced with saddness and fear.

Why taketh they another breath?
Why suffer they any longer.
Weapon in hand some kill themselves
the depression and fear much stronger.

Is there anyone yet alive...
among these fallen men?
Shall anyone survive...
this day that seemeth like hell.

The enemy closes in on them,
their hands stained red with with blood.
Lurking in the shadows they conceal theit posirtion,
aiming to destroy like a raging flood.

The few that remain join together.
Outnumbered and wounded they refuse to give up.....
they refuse to die this bloody night...
....without putting up a fight...

Weapons in hand they stand their ground.
Their blood drenched clothes stuck to their bodies.
Their war beaten face set hard.
Soldiers to the very end...

The signal is given and the enemies pounce.
Like a pack of wolves they chase their prey.
Mercilessly they slaughter them.
Without remorse they kill their victums...

A star falls from the heavens...
It shoots across the sky...
...bearing this message.....

"An empire has fallen.
It's defenders dead.
Under these dark skies,
blood has been shed.
How the mighty have fallen!!
How the strong is made weak!!!!
He who thought he was most powerful,
has now died in defeat!"

As if in grief tears fall from the sky,
as the heavens kiss this once strong nation
goodbye.

The darkness receeds
as light shines forth.

A new era,

......has begun....
*****I've decided to submit this poem under the theme nightmares in the attention4urart[link] group:)

Just wrote this poem. Started with the first few lines then just kept writing until it came to the end.

Personally a bit strange to me cause this is my second war related poem in a row and my first two might i add. Here's my previous poem i wrote [link] it's title is "In The Name Of WAR".

Both poems r different so i suggest you read them both. "war" related yet both having its own differences and messages.

If u like my poems feel free to check out my gallery. i do different types of art including some drawing and sculpting so if u want to read my poems in particular, check the poems folder in my gallery.

Not all my poems are "dark" btw. So don't think i'm some dark dude cause i'm not.
Never been to war. Wasn't born during WW1 or 2. Have no intention of joining the army, military, navy, airforce(though i want to know to fly those planes including military ones:woohoo:) etc.

I simply wrote a poem when i became "inspired" to. It wasn't planned. Just kept writing and that resulted in the poem u just read:D

Anyway, i hope u "enjoy" it and please comment. i wanna know what u readers think:?

Plz and thank you!:)



p.s. background image i got from the internat. here's the link to the original site[link] with the pic
i don't wanna be accused of stealing someone's work.
I added the words.
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Super6-4 Featured By Owner May 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Mother of God. That was amazing. We'd like this in the group All-Military.

Also, would you object to me using this, possibly, in my sci-fi story? I'm not sure if I will, or how I would, but there's some awesome lines in there.
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DEANJENO--art Featured By Owner May 4, 2012  Student General Artist
LOL!!!!!! THANKS :headbang:

you've got my permission once you mention my name / credit for the poem itself. I'm not a big fan of plagurism so it'll somewhat suffice if you'll at least mention my penname, Deanjeno.

Another thing, if you can, link me a copy of the story. It sounds REALLY interesting. No one has ever asked to include my poems in a story before. Sounds pretty cool to me and i'd LOVE to see it incorporated.:D
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Super6-4 Featured By Owner May 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Well, the part I intended it for isn't up yet, but here's the 1st 3 chapters:

Chapter 1: [link]
Chapter 2: [link]
Chapter 3: [link]
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Simpson240 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
A good piece, with more imagery then I know what to do with.
But, alas... it has a cost.
In every poem, a balance must be kept. A battle not unlike that portrayed in this story. The Epic Battle between FLOW, and IMAGERY. too much flow, you have a dry text. too much imagery, you run the risk of not having a poem at all...and ...erm... imagery won.... big time here... Don't worry, your writing did have SOME flow to it, and I was rather happy with it in the begging. But, as your mind raced, picturing this epic scene, you got so caught up in writing the story and forgot about the Flow.
Furthermore, while you use a pretty wide vocabulary in this piece, you need to be mindful of certain word placements. Using a word too often drys out the text.
Over all, it was a interesting story, and I could defiantly see a few more pieces being uploaded taking place is this barren, war torn land.
Good work.
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Viking63 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
So intense. :o
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DEANJENO--art Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2011  Student General Artist
thank u:). I love to use vivid imagery and so forth to give my readers a poem like no other:)
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011  Professional Writer
Very vivid imagery. Bloody and dark. I feel like you capture the destruction of this empire very well. Good work!
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DEANJENO--art Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011  Student General Artist
thanks!!! :woohoo: I am truly happy that you "enjoyed" it.:)

Honestly....i didn't even know my poem would end like this....or be so tragic. i simply took it one step or is it stanza at a time until finally i finished. This is one of my darkest poems and my second war one in a row...

anyway, i am truly happy u liked it:D and i appreciate you taking the time to comment:):):)
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HayleyRippingale Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011
This is truly amazing. The detail in description is fantastic, I could imagine the scenery and the feelings that were carried through. This is certainly one of the best poems I have read in a very long time. xXx
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DEANJENO--art Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011  Student General Artist
thank u!:woohoo::bow:
It pleases me to know that u appreciate my work so much:)

I really appreciate u taking the time to comment. that means alot to me:)
Thank u again for ur most welcomed comment:D
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