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Below the surface,
Lie dead men's bones.

Rotting coffins
Hold the still remains
Of once strong men
Some who died in vain.

Buried deep
Below piles of earth
The corpses rest
Where no one can hurt.

Below the surface,
Lie dead men's bones.

Bones belonging to the young and old.
Bones belonging to the rich and poor.
Bones bearing bullet holes.
Bones broken revealing the core.

The corpses lie
Their eyes shut tight;
Their bodies rigid
Like a block of ice.

Below the surface
Lie dead men's bones.

Numbered among the dead,
Their last words still unspoken.
Their final resting place they've chosen.
To live or die was their choice.

Daily their numbers grow.
For everyone the end draws nearer.
The day we shall all see shall come.
After which , we each go, to his final dwelling place.

Below the surface Lie dead men's bones;
Bones that may belong to us some day.
Hey! This is one of my favourite "dark" poems. I've decided to enter it into the theme of the week, "destruction" in the "Unseen Writers" group. Hope u all like it and feel free to comment! :D
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Simpson240 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
This piece has a lot of meaning to it, and is surprisingly deep.
This piece is a much better example of flowing poetry than some of your other works, which is a very good thing.
all in all, it's a pretty standard poem. You have a opening, middle, and the closure, good imagery and flow, Even patterns!
You seem to be very proud of your darker works. :)
Good work.
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DEANJENO--art Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Student General Artist
My "dark" poems on average get more views u see. So it is my assumption that my audience enjoys them more. The majority of my poems have some deeper/intended meaning which not all readers may recognise;)
For some strange reasons writing poetry sometimes makes me laugh.:D I wanted to burst out laughing after i'd written the two war poems u read earlier. (weird sense of humor there lol)
So i guess u could say i enjoy writing dark poetry but i really am not a dark, evil dude in case ur wondering:?
Check out this poem if u like[link] It's one of my non-dark poems on this site:)
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Simpson240 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
interesting :P
ill be sure to check it out :)
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Rathenmedus Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Very intriguing piece of literature. Very well done. :thumbsup:
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DEANJENO--art Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011  Student General Artist
thank you. :D I am glad u enjoyed it. :) It is one of my favourite works.
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Rathenmedus Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I can tell. I can see you put a lot of effort into. Great job, keep it up ;)
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DEANJENO--art Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011  Student General Artist
thank you for your wonderful, encouraging comment! :D
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Sailormoonalltheway Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2011
amazing :)
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imapoetaniknowit Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2011
I like it, and I love the Final words part, But one sentence that confused me was To live or die was their choice. What if they were murdered, or something?
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